The twins are all eerie smiles, pale hands, blonde hair. From my trapeze swing, I feel their gazes.
The only thing worse is the clawing, clawing, clawing on my legs, my ankles, my feet. Tearing through my stockings, sharp like razors.
Through my tears, I see them, the faces of demons and imps leering and sneering. Lips and teeth snapping and grazing, my vision is fading. Stinging, it's stinging but I must keep swinging.
The smoke smells sweet and rotten and cloying, I want to stop breathing, it's all overwhelming. Why do they watch me, why do they scratch me? I must keep swinging, not stopping, keep swinging.
It's kittens that scratch me, not imps, not demons. My legs are stinging, but I was wrong, it's only kittens.
My legs, my ankles, my feet are bleeding. I'm not swinging, I'm swaying. My thoughts are reeling.
The twins smile sweetly, hands pale, hair blonde. I'm not swinging, I'm swaying. Where's my swing? I'm resting. On a cushion, hands folded, skirt pleated.
Still the smoke is sweet and rotten and cloying. Under the door it escapes, twirling and swirling, touching my nose in tendrils unfurling.
The twins do not move, do not twitch, do not blink. The door opens and father tumbles and fumbles out with the smoke. The fellow who follows holds a pipe that is billowing. It's smell is sweet and rotten and cloying.
Contest details:
I have included an inspiration board on Pinterest: Behind the Curtain. You are not required to use an image there, but I do encourage you to do so. If one does inspire you, please include it in your entry.
Your stories may be up to 400 words, but don't let that fool you. BREVITY is the soul of wit. Only include those words that allow you to tell a powerful story.
The contest opens at midnight EST on Oct 2 and continues till Midnight Saturday, October 13. That's less than 11 days, better get started.
Post your story on your blog and link up through the tool below. Be sure to include the appropriate code so people can read through the other entries from your blog. Read the other entries and comment - writers love the feedback.
Only a few other rules.
No fan fiction - original worlds only.
No erotica - seduction and sex is fine, but graphic descriptions should not be the focus of the story
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Hauntingly beautiful my dear. Twins are always evil.
ReplyDeleteHoly gorgeousness, Laura! You're a poet!! I'm sooooo impressed. I LOVE it! :) :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful, Laura!! I love the swinging, lyrical feel to the prose that reminds me of the picture. Beautifully done! : )
ReplyDeleteLaura you scare me! That is a compliment by the way as I don't scare easily. The flick-flack between real/unreal is masterful - well done. Can't believe this is your first go.
ReplyDeleteFantastically lyrical piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteVery surreal!
ReplyDeleteI didn't fully understand it but I fully agree with Sophie: wholly gorgeousness! You are a poet. This had such a lyrical, 'unfurling' cadence and the imagery was marvelous. I KNEW your entry would be wonderful!
ReplyDeleteI love your language in this; I agree that it's very poetic. I got a very real sense of being within this shifting hallucination. I think this is the first time i've read a piece of your fiction! It is wonderful! I'd like to read more!
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone! Anna's Pinterest board made me think of Olde London and opium dens... and men who were so addicted that they brought their little daughters to get a quick fix... and what if the daughter inhaled some of the smoke....
ReplyDeleteI love the flow of this piece! Beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteI love how you've combined flow and fragmentation to let us live in her head - beautifully done!
ReplyDeleteSo poetic! Lovely. :-)
ReplyDeleteThis has a great feel to it... it's dreamlike and works on several different levels all at the same time. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteVery lyrical writing--I've not read any other entries with this flavor. You should write a collection of poems, they'd be fascinating to read.
ReplyDeleteThe music of this is so lulling and mesmerizing. Thanks for entering, Laura!
ReplyDeleteHauntingly beautiful with some fascinatingly lyrical prose. Great story!
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